"I have no time."
This is what she said
when I asked her about blogging.
A friend of mine stopped
blogging because she could not manage her time well. She found it hard when she
became a college student. As freshman, she had a tight schedule that made her
put away her blog and focused on her college life. She was very busy. She went
to the university on week days and did part-time job as tutor in a course on
weekends. In the evening, she also had to help her sister in tutoring
elementary school students who join her sister's course. The course is started
at 7 p.m. to 9 p.m. Being a college student with tight schedule and a tutor in
two courses is so tiring. Therefore, she decided to stop blogging.
I also asked her the reason why she blogs and she
mentioned two reasons. First, she can share her story and experience
through blogging. She posted random content such as, her story of life, short
stories, and sometimes she wrote about her friend’s experiences. She is very
happy and pleased when people read her writings. The second reason is that she
loves writing. She loves to write what she feels such as writing a diary,
stories, and many more. Therefore, she used blog as the platform to
share her writings.
There is something funny
that I found from our talk. She said that she ever posted a personal matter in
her blog and within a minute she just deletes the post. What comes up in my
mind is just like "Oh My God, how can she post that kind of writing? Did
she lose her mind?" ---
But, yeah fortunately
she realized what she has been done is not a good thing.
That is the story
of my friend's experience in blogging. Where is yours?
These are some mistakes that I found in your blog:
ReplyDelete1. The opening, there are double apostrophes occured in the sentence ""I have no time""
2. I think the sentence below should be joined to a single sentence by using the word "therefore" as the bridge. And I think the word "is" should be changed to past tense since your paragraph is talking about past event.
This is my recommendation:
"Being a college student with tight schedule and a tutor in two courses at once was so tiring for her, therefore, she decided to stop blogging."
3. The arrangement of the paragraphs doesn't look so well because the second paragraph's spacing is different to the others. (It is just an advice)
4. Lastly, I think you need to pay more attention to the grammatical mistakes for once again because I also found some words that should be in past tense in paragrpah 4, like the word "is", "deletes", "can", etc.